Captin Six

I think it's delightful.

really groovy, like an old movie on one of those reel projectors. ~Six

*plays the bongos* I can relate and appreciate that daddio..^_^

This had sort of a Sixth Sense theme to it...though a completely different story; with just enough detail to make entertaining and not sluggish. I felt the main character's emotions ...

That reply makes me happy. You get a cookie! ~Capn't Six

I can see some sort of life journey, however placid it maybe. Is he coming or going or staying? I suppose in that one can find beauty. ~Capn't Six

Once again lovely. Absolutely lovely. ^_^] Keep on Keepin' on, ~Capn't Six

Okay did a quick revise. For all of your pretentiousness you had some valid points. I like it better now. ^_^

See I respond better to this kind of critque. (however you spell that) Consider the commas detached and buried in shallow graves. ^_^ Keep on , Keepin' on, Capn't Six

Thank you very much. *tips invisible hat* I'm glad you caught the reference to the Scottish Play. ^_^ That made me smile. ~Capn't Six

*giggles* Oh I simply can't wait to make your brains ache once more! How splendid!

You people look far too deeply at some points and then not deeply enough in others. If all you can see are grammatical errors then you're missing the point of ...

I agree with UberJimmy. Leaves one to wonder and ponder and do all sorts of thinking. Well done. ^_^ ~Capn't Six

The last line did catch the eye. However, on a whole it's lacking and slightly childish. What does winter personify? Just think a little harder, tear apart your subject, disect ...

My gods...you understood it! BRAVO! ~Six